Board Thread:Off-Topic/@comment-182.178.166.126-20121216115119/@comment-1785597-20121216122902

A little constructive criticism:


 * Bad punctuation and grammar in general really makes a fanfic look bad. Please improve the grammar.


 * Bloons is a plural noun, at least in the Bloons Universe.


 * All these sentences are extremely lackluster and dull. There's a huge lack of effort in getting the reader's attention here.
 * Monkeys vs Bloons. Very boring and generic plot. Bleh.
 * The story is not being told very good; are you summarizing the events? :S

Sorry, but I give this chapter a 2/10. Hopefully, next chapter will be better. Better storytelling, along with more fact checking would really help.
 * ZOMG's aren't exactly living things, so they can't die. BFBs can't talk either.